Actions after feedback

Dialogue- After reviewing our rough cut we realised that the dialogue was  very unclear and did not layout the basic narrative , we felt that in the rough cut there was to much unnecessary dialogue and so we cut it down to just a few lines. However making sure that the narrative was clearly stated within it.  


Film steadier shots - Some of our shots where very shaky and unsteady when reviewed in our rough cut so in order for us to ensure that our opening scene would look professional and realistic we had to refilm certain shots.

One suggestion that we decided to consider was to cross cut between the detectives within the opening sequence. we felt that by doing this we would be able to the show the reactions of the detectives to the news and show how they process the information.
Our credits in the rough cut where not as detailed as they needed to be. so in our final cut we improved our credits by incorporating then within our props.

For props we were given feedback that there needed to be more so we added and ipod into the scene with two detectives in it and managed to link it in with the story line .We also printed fake case files including  images of same people on wall to make the office it look more believable.  

 

In particular something that was pointed out to us was the way in which the footage seemed to jump from one narrative stand to the next; and this made the relation between the two strands more difficult to understand. There is of course transitions between the two strands, but it may be more effective to integrate the two strands further. A means of doing this could be to juxtapose a shot representing the antagonist with a shot representing the protagonist: by placing these in an alternating sequence we would be able not only to indicate a relationship between the two stands but also the represent a battle by the opposition of two contrasting images.